Still with Dark One’s Bride, my dear Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday Folk. I’d hoped to further along by now, but things happened, so I’ve only just reached the end of chapter two. Which would be fine, if it wasn’t for the fact that most of it was written previously… Grr.
This piece takes a little leap from last week’s with Clara finally arriving at the Endlight castle…
The dreadful swaying slowed then, at last, they came to a halt. The carriage rocked further as the driver stepped down and several thuds on the carriage wall at her back spoke of her luggage being removed from the storage rack above.
Clara hastened to smooth her skirts, gave up and focused on her sleeves. She was dressed from head to toe in rich black silk. The hems and sleeves were heavy in grey embroidery, dark echoes of the Great Lord’s fiery symbol. Content that everything was presentable, she sat on the edge of her seat and waited for someone to open the carriage door, all the while desperately fighting the urge to do it herself.
The latch clicked and the door swung out into the bustle beyond.
“Clara?” Tommy called. Her page stood by the door, his sweet face pulled into a puzzled frown. During the last few stops, she’d all but leapt from the carriage.
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Aldrea Alien 
I love the name Endlight Castle. It sounds perfect for some Gothic skullduggery.
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One step up from the Citadel above the village of Everdark. I had so much fun naming everything in this kingdom.
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It sounds like she is slowly learning to be patient. I wonder what else she is going to discover.
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Let’s hope she manages to learn it before book three, she’s going to need a lot of patience then.
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Love the dark feel of this, right down to her clothes.
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Thanks. 🙂
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Hmm. So why the reticence now? Very visual scene, Aldrea. Great piece of writing.
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Got to act proper, you know.
Also… nerves. Everyone knows about her here.
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Waiting for the sake of propriety? Or is she nervous and trying to put it off?
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A little from column A, a little from column B…
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She appears to be getting herself under control somehow.
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Nothing like a little bout of nerves to temper excitement.
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I get carsick, I can only imagine how badly I’d want out of a carriage.
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Especially when going over uneven cobblestone. Sometimes, walking would just be better.
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Very atmospheric and great details – loved the excerpt!
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Thank you. 🙂
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Great buildup!
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Thanks. 🙂
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That last para is so perfect–the way you juxtapose past behavior at stops with the current one. 🙂 Nice!
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Thanks.
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I wonder why she is so hesitant. Good snippet. 🙂
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Thank you. 🙂
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