Sticking with continuing on from last week’s snippet from my wip, To Target the Heart.
For those of you catching up… Darshan is the magical prince and ambassador from the ginormous Udynea Empire sent to negotiate trade relations with Tirglas. Whereas Hamish is the third eldest child of the Tirglasian queen.
The prior sentence was: “Neither have I,” Hamish blurted as if such a fact could be open to contestation.
Darshan inclined his head in acknowledgement. “Then this will be somewhat virgin ground for the both of us.” He stressed those last few words, making sure that detail had reached Hamish. “And we have yet to figure out each other’s tastes beyond a few fumbling moves.” On his part, at least. Hamish certainly knew what he was doing orally and Darshan was more than happy with that performance—the very thought of it sent a pleasant shiver through him—but it wasn’t much to base any sort of relationship on, even one forged solely for sex. “If we are to become paramours, we should perhaps see if our previous attempt at intimacy cannot be improved upon.”
“Aye, but tonight? It’s nae that I’m adverse to the idea, it’s just… real soon like.”
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Having staved off the idea of marrying a woman for years, Prince Hamish finds himself forced to face its realities when he becomes the prize in a contest of arms. But one contestant promises a way out. Can they win against all the odds?
Aldrea Alien 
I love Hamish’s hesitancy. Great snippet, Aldrea. 🙂
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Thanks! 😀
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Heh, love the way he emphasizes “virgin ground”. (heart)
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lol
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Wonderful play on words! I adore their teasing courtship.
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Thank you. 😀
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Now I think they might be overthinking this, trying to hash out all the possibilities in advance, but i’m enjoying their conversation of course. Great snippet!
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Definitely a smidge of overthinking going on. 🙂
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Love their banter. Great snippet.
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Thank you. 🙂
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Interesting how business like they’re being about it. Is that an attempt to control the uncontrollable?
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A little bit, yeah.
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I can understand the hesitation. They’re playing a dangerous game and it’s moving fast.
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Definitely dangerous. But more so for one of them.
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Hamish’s hesitation is easy to understand, perhaps even understated, and Darshan’s forthrightness says a lot about how quickly he adjusts to new situations.
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You do a fantastic job writing Hamish’s brogue. 🙂 That last line is excellent.
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Thank you. 😀
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Love the way the two dance around the issue. Strengthens the relationship and prolongs the tension. Very nice.
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Thanks. 😀
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Maybe Hamish was looking for the equivalent of “Netflix and chill”?
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That’s pretty much been the range of Hamish’s experience.
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Ha! Virgin ground. Nice.
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😀
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I love how analytical he’s being about the whole thing. ❤️
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For now. 🙂
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I don’t think his protest is heartfelt.
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Not in the slightest… well, maybe a teensy bit.
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I like their hesitancy and how they’re feeling each other out
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I like how they’re figuring this out with each other.
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Really love what’s building between these two – the banter is almost a veil for their uncertainty about how this is going to play out!
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